One day you are walking along the deck of the ship when you hear a loud bang. You start to run as you see smoke coming from the far end of the ship. You run towards the room where your patients are waiting to receive treatment from the doctor. Just as you arrive at the door to their room you hear another loud bang and you . . . . fall to the ground in horror.
The ship was in silence. . . . . .BANG! The ship splits into two pieces and starts tipping on its side. Screams of fear echoed through the room.
All the equipment starts tipping, bottle's smash and bandages fall off their shelves.
The ship has now fully tipped over and everyone is now standing on the roof! NOT FOR LONG?!?!!
The room starts to slowly fill up with water and everyone's first reaction was to go to the door, except it was locked! Then they go for the window it was locked as well, so one of the soldiers struggled to stand up and smashed the window. They all got out one by one and swam to land. Some of the soldiers helped us to get to safety and put us with the other survivors. Once everyone goes back to their trenches the soldiers helped the captain of the ship get the radio on to contact the others to send in another ship.
2:12 AM the new ship arrived and had a new crew of soldiers and nurses we were saved!
How would your story go if you had been on the ship?
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What a great story. It is really hard to imagine being in a situation like this. We have been so lucky in our lifetimes that we have not had another World War. I am really enjoying reading your Summer Learning Journey and looking forward to the next 2 weeks.
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Hey Sam,
ReplyDeleteYour story is quite action packed, I like how detailed you were about what was happening on the ship. I am curious as to where the banging sounds came from.. Was it an enemy ships canon or submarine? Perhaps next time you could be little more descriptive about what was going on outside of the Red Cross ship that was causing the chaos. Maybe you could write a part of the story from the enemy’s perspective, what do you think?
If I were writing a continuation of the story I’d probably create a scene where the enemy confronts the nurses, aides and patients aboard the Red Cross ship. I’d write about how those aboard Red Cross ship overpowered the enemy somehow and made it away safely. Is there anything you would add or change in your completed story?
Toe feiloa’i fo’i,
Cia.